One day a little jack rabbit was playing his newest trick on a little fawn. His name was tricky. Hinds the name trick. Well the little fawn was just eating out of his little spot ware he goes every day with his mother. Tricky was trying to get Little Fawn’s his food plot. The Little fawn didn’t want to give him his food plot. But the rabbit told him he would give him a surprise. The Little Fawn took the deal. The rabbit gave him his surprise it was nothing. Little Fawn was tricked. The two dear went to go find a new food plot in shame. All the sudden a swan came up to the rabbit. She told him that you better change your ways or you will get a surprise. The rabbit was so greedy, mean, and cold hearted. He loved surprises. He said what I have to change. But before he could ask she was gone. But ware the swan was standing a note was in her place. He picked it up and read it. It said stop tricking animals out of their things, stop being mean to hopeless animals, and stop belong cold hearted. The rabbit didn’t care he just threw the note and went on eating out of his food plot. That night the rabbit herd sounds he got up and looked around. Out of no ware a flash of light hit him, and knocked him out. The next day when he woke up he felt funny. He felt warm hearted. He didn’t have the feeling to trick some one. He hated it but he couldn’t be mean. As the day went on he realized that it was probably better to be nice. He felt so good that he decided to call this day Valentines Day because the little fawn that he tricked his name was Valentine. Trickster’s new name was Careful. He found the little fawn and gave him and his mother back their food plot. That was the day the trickiest animal began loving.
Lauren, I liked your story alot. I think that you wrote alot and thats what made it so detailed. I wish you have written more becasue I really enjoyed your post.
ReplyDeleteI loved how everything got all tied in at the end and how it has alot of good folktale stuff in it....goodjob!
ReplyDeleteYour story could use a little more details.
ReplyDeleteIt was good other than that.